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Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


I am not an open book
Indeed, I am a fickle one
Demanding worth readers, exclusively,
And difficult to impress -
Though the only way to break my bind.

And even so, my pages are stiff
And when they bend, they remain contorted,
Deformed.

And even the most worthy
Cannot access all of me
Crucial plot keys are contained
in pages
Glued firmly together.
©2007-2009 ~fallen-princess
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-yo, what's with all the journals? this is an ART website.
-whatevz yo, but here, have your art.

(that conversation never really took place)

written in the early early hours of june 29th in a little hotel room in london, following an incident that will almost-undoubtedly make it into my autobiography, should i ever do anything to make me worthy of an autobiography anyone has any interest in reading.

i am not a fan of the first stanza but felt it was a necessary foundation for the rest. any suggestions on how to make it less crap would be appreciated.
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~emwyalyce:iconemwyalyce: Jul 17, 2007, 6:46:24 PM
i love this! very poetic!! i would truly love to read your autobiography, i hope you do put it up =)
as always a very great piece!! =)


much love!

:heart:

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~justpolly:iconjustpolly: Jul 18, 2007, 7:54:16 AM
really like this, imagery is sound and it communicates a lot
most poetry's autobiographical, i think.

only thing i would change is 'difficult to impress' - is that meant to be a personification on behalf of the book? can't see it working explicitly, maybe i just need a better explanation

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you say i'm weird as if it's a bad thing...
~fallen-princess:iconfallen-princess: Jul 20, 2007, 2:50:23 AM
lol we'll see. i think i still have a lot more living to do before there is an autobiography in the works lol.

thank you muchly :)

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~fallen-princess:iconfallen-princess: Jul 20, 2007, 2:52:39 AM
a problem i often encounter when using metaphors is using words or qualities that apply to the actual thing but that don't work so well with the metaphor. seems i have done it again lol. what i was getting across is that _i_ am difficult to impress, in this particular sense, and that if i was a book, this trait would transcend. but that doesn't make sense so i'll rethink it later on :)

thank you for the feedback, as always.

have you gotten your grades for the year yet?

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~justpolly:iconjustpolly: Jul 20, 2007, 7:43:34 AM
understood the intention, but it's somewhat incongruent with the metaphor, sure you figured that out though

got most of them so far, not that bad, would've liked some things to be better, often missed out on my target grade by 1 or 2 marks- that, i swear, is the most evil thing in the world.

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you say i'm weird as if it's a bad thing...
~fallen-heights:iconfallen-heights: Jul 21, 2007, 5:17:48 AM
nice work, like it. :)

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<3The portrait that it paints of you, is a perfect work of art<3
~fallen-princess:iconfallen-princess: Jul 26, 2007, 8:35:46 AM
you have target grades? sheesh, motivated much? lol

i got my grades for first semester and i was very happy with all of them. pretty much what i was expecting, except philosophy for which i received a higher mark than i was expecting. but the philo department at my uni is kind of slack so it's not that surprising lol.

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~fallen-princess:iconfallen-princess: Jul 26, 2007, 8:36:05 AM
ta :)

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~justpolly:iconjustpolly: Jul 26, 2007, 10:40:54 AM
glad to hear you're doin well =) basically i know i need a second upper at the end of my honours' course so i gotta have a high average don't i?=p got a B+ average which is doooable i suppose, but not quite, so yeah, got target grades set

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you say i'm weird as if it's a bad thing...
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